(RareJob tutor's revised sentences)
We are subscribed to Yomiuri Shimbun newspaper and last month we found an interesting advertisement. The Yomiuri group, owner of both Yomiuri Shimbun newspaper and the Yomiuri Giants decided to hold a "thank you(39) thank you(39)" bus tour to Celebrate Yomiuri Giants’ victory in this year’s Japanese Baseball Championships. The fare for the bus tour is 3,939 yen.
(My original sentences)
We subscribe Yomiuri Shimbun newspaper, and found an interesting advertisement last month.
After the Yomiuri Giant's this year's victory in the Japanese baseball team, the Yomiuri group decided to held "thank you(39) thank you(39)" bus tour The bus tour price was 3,939 yen.
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(Tutor's revised sentences)
Many might wonder why “Thank you” is 39 (thirty nine).
In America, some people use the shortcut 4U to say “for you”, it is kind of similar with the usage of “39” to say “thank you” here in Japan.
(My original sentences)
Why "thank you" is 39 (three nine)?
In English, some Americans write "4u" to express "for you." "39" here is like the same kind.
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(Tutor's revised sentences)
In the Japanese language,
3 is read as "san," the pronunciation is similar to "than"
9 is read "kyu," the pronunciation is similar to "k you"(My original sentences)
(My original sentences)
In the Japanese language,
3 is read "san," the pronounciation is likely to "than"
9 is read "kyu," the pronounciation is likely to "k you"
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(Tutor's revised sentences)
They are trying to express their gratitude through this promo. This is their way of saying “Thank you” for supporting to their baseball team, the Yomiuri Giants.
Since the price was reasonable, we decided to participate in the bus tour which took place last December 21.
Arashiyama was the last stop and the main event of the tour. Walking under the lighting Arashiyama is a popular activity.
(My original sentences)
They try to mean "Thank you!" "Thank you!" for our supporting their baseball team, the Yomiuri Giants.
The price was good, so we applied for participating the bus tour on December 21.
The main stop was the night walking under lighting in Arashiyama.
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(Tutor's sentences)
Our bus left Himeji station at 9:30am. Usually bus tour prices are inclusive of lunch but this one did not.
If we were to take trains from Himeji to Kyoto by Japan Railway, the fare is 2,210 yen for a one way ticket. That means, a back and forth trip would cost 4,420 yen.
(My original sentences)
Our bus left 9:30 a.m. in front of Himeji station. Usually the bus tour includes the lunch included in the price of the tour. But it was not included.
If we take trains from Himeji to Kyoto by Japan Railway, the train fare is 2,210 yen in one way, which means 4,420 yen for going and back.
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(Tutor's sentences)
For our bus tour, the price was only 3,939 yen inclusive of dinner. The bus attendant called us in advance to inform us that we could either bring our own lunch box or buy lunch at the highway stop.
We were also told that we wouldn’t have enough time to stop and eat lunch so we have to eat lunch inside the moving bus.
As for us, we opted to buy our lunch from one of the shops at the bus stop and ate it on the bus. Many other participants did the same.
After lunch, we dropped by two souvenir shops; shop sells sweets while the other one sells salty products from Kyoto.
(My original sentences)
However, the price of the bus tour was only 3,939 yen including the dinner. The bus attendant called us in advance that we have to bring lunch box or buy lunch on a shop when we stop by in a high way parking area. We were also told that we didn't have enough time to eat lunch in a shop; we had to eat our lunch on the moving bus.
We bought our lunch on the high way parking lot, and ate it on the bus. Many of the participants did the same as we did.
After lunch, we stopped at two sourvienor shops; one was a sweet one, and the other is a salty one in Kyoto.
[2013/12/27 10:14:04] O. Kay: One shop was Yatsuhashi sweet shop. The other was Tsukemono Salty shop.
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(Tutor's sentences)
After going to the souvenir shops the attendant told us “Our next stop is a Bazaar inside a temple ground, You will find many pop-up stores there. You may be surprised to see thousands of people visiting there. The bazaar is held every 21st day of the month.
Like what we have been told, there were indeed a lot of pop-up stores and the place was very crowded. Unfortunately, it began raining while we were there.
(My original sentences)
After that, the bus tour attendant told us "The next stop is a big market in a temple. You will find a thousand instant shops there. You may be surprised that one thousands of people are visiting there. The market is held every 21st day of month (Jan. 21, Feb. 21, Mar. 21, ...., and Dec. 21).
There were so many instant shops, and the place was so crowded. The most terrible thing was it was started raining.
(Tutor's sentences)
As per our schedule, we had our early dinner at 4:00 p.m. It was at the second floor of a large souvenir shop. The price of the dinner was said to be 1,200 yen per person.
I have participated in many kinds of bus tours, and the dinner here was the best as I ever had.
I have participated in many kinds of bus tours, and the dinner here was the best as I ever had.
(My original sentences)
We took early dinner at 4:00 p.m. as scheduled at the second floor of a large sourvenior shop.
The price was shown 1,200 yen per person.
I have participated in many kinds of bus tours, and the dinner here was the best as I have had.
As you can see in the picture below, the ground is still wet from the rain, the picture was taken at about 4:30 p.m from the restaurant where we were having our early dinner.
(My Original sentences)
You can find the ground is wet in the picture below.
It was taken around 4:30 p.m. from the place where we took our dinner.
(Tutor's sentences)
We enjoyed night walking in Arashiyama, Kyoto. Light up event was began at 5:00 p.m. in a bamboo forest. During this time of the year, it's already dark at 5.p.m.
(My original sentences)
We enjoyed night walking in Arashiyama, Kyoto. Light up event was held from 5:00 p.m. in a bamboo forest. It was already dark at 5:00 p.m. at this time of the year.
(Tutor's sentences)
The bamboo road was narrow. Local tourist guide said "This lightning event is very popular, and we expect many tourists on weekends so people are supposed to walk only in a single direction" however, in the reality, many people are going back and forth in the one way street. What's worse was everyone was holding their umbrella, it made the area appear even more congested and I had terrible time taking pictures.
(My original sentences)
The bamboo road was narrow. Local guide people said "This lightning event is very popular, so we expect many tourists visit on weekend, so please don't stop, just go ahead." People are supposed to walk one way only, however, in the reality, many people are going and back on the one way street. And what's worse everyone had their umbrella on their hand, so it became so crowded and I had terrible when taking pictures.
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(Tutor's sentence)
If it weren't raining and not as crowded as such, I could have taken better pictures.
(My original sentence)
If it were not raining, and not crowded as such, I could have taken more good pictures.
(Tutor's sentences)
A man in a blue shirt is sailing the boat in this picture. There were a lot of people inside the cruising boat. Unfortunately, this picture was taken from afar and the people inside cannot be seen.
(My original sentences)
A man who wearing blue is sailing a boat in the picture below.
I found many people inside the crusing boat.
Sorry that you cannot find people inside the boat from the picture.
(Tutor's sentences)
I'm sure that the customers can enjoy their meal while watching the beautiful scenery. However, this seems like an expensive restaurant to dine in.
I'm sure that the customers can enjoy their meal while watching the beautiful scenery. However, this seems like an expensive restaurant to dine in.
(My Original sentences)
This restraunt looked nice.
I'm sure that customers can enjoy wonderful scenery while having a nice dinner,
but the dishes may cost a lot.
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